I was alone at home watching television when the phone rang, l shuffled my way to the phone and answer it. When I answer the phone, a man told me that my younger brother john was kidnapped and the demand a ransom of twenty thousand dollars if l didn’t appeared with the money by two day in a factory near the blog 456 they will show my John no mercy and do not call the police.
I immediately called my parents and told them want have happening to John and tell them to came back. At home my dad said to call the police but I tell him not to they will kill John but dad said police can help us but I insisted that we get twenty thousand dollars and gave the man and have John back.
Two days have pass but we haven got enough the money but my mother and I still decided to go to the factory. At the factory the kidnapper asked where is the money, I threw the bag to the kidnapper. He look into the bag and shouted there is on ten thousand dollars I asked for twenty as he took out a knife and place it at John neck. Suddenly a few policemen came out and said put your knife down and the police handcuff him and brought him back to the police station for question mom ran towards tom and hugged him as she cried my heart was finally full of joy.
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Good!But improve on your english.
Dear GY,
I can see the effort you put into writing this story. Good. Keep it up. The story has been edited for sentence structure for you. Do read through.
I was alone at home watching television when the phone rang. l shuffled my way to the phone and answered it. A man told me that my younger brother, John, was kidnapped and he demanded a ransom of twenty thousand dollars from me. He threatened that if l didn’t appeared with the money by two that day in a factory near the block 456, they would show John no mercy. He also warned me not to call the police.
I immediately called my parents and related the whole incident to them and told them to come back.
When they reached home, my dad suggested calling the police as they might be able to help us but I told him not to as they would kill John. I insisted on getting twenty thousand dollars to exchange for John.
Two days had passed. Although we had not gotten enough money, my mother and I still decided to go to the factory. At the factory, the kidnapper asked for the money and I threw the bag to the kidnapper. He looked into the bag and shouted that there was only half of what he had asked for. Then he took out a knife and placed it near John's neck. Suddenly a few policemen came out and ordered the kidnapper to put down their weapon and surrender as he was surrounded. When he saw that there was no way out, he put down his knife and raise his hands. The police handcuffed him and brought him back to the police station for questioning. Mom ran towards John and hugged him in joy.
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